Thursday, December 8, 2011

the Tired Monk's City - Night

i)

black city snow flies
settles in
cold
cast in blue lights

ii)

the Tired Monk
slips through drifts
walking stick steadies
a clearing...
stars and distant city lights

13 comments:

  1. You have captured a lovely image within the clearing (love that).

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  2. Old Ollie,

    Your image of the city has an auterity about it. Simply the impersonal feel, even with city snow...
    Tired Monk lives in a better place. The city is far enough away to allow him the peace he requires..
    ( Rather like myself living in Macclesfield, as opposed to the city of Manchester. Thanks for your comment Ollie!!)

    Best Wishes, Eileen

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  3. I really like the sound of these lines:
    'the Tired Monk
    slips through drifts
    walking stick steadies'

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  4. So beautiful - makes me want to go for a walk at night! In the country the stars are glorious.

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  5. Well written! Reminds me of winter.

    Erick Flores

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  6. I don't want to walk in those cold city nights...

    Nice one ~

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  7. You draw the tired monk clearly, and then the whole scene is lit by that last line.

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  8. that "black snow" only appears when the lights are behind it... it's a specific image that always surprises me.

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  9. this made me want to walk those same dark, cold streets...

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