Thursday, February 16, 2012

going home

the match was tight
no faking
no pulled punches
no step back ducking
even when the ropes became chains

30 minutes slips to 60
sweat slips to blood
no more smile just gritted teeth
set up...for one more counter...
a voice

take it home!
go home!

isn't that it?
isn't that all we're doing?




sorry...obscure...today, just let the tired monk vent
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10 comments:

  1. Kat MortensenFebruary 16, 2012 at 11:01 AM

    Sounds like, "Fight Club".

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  2. boogulooFebruary 16, 2012 at 11:50 AM

    Bloody nice write Ollie.

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  3. Sherry Blue SkyFebruary 16, 2012 at 12:20 PM

    Yes, that's what we're all doing. Love this, Ollie. It reminded me though of a televised fight I watched with my family when I was around eight or nine.......somehow one of the wrestlers got his head trapped between a lower rope and the top rope somehow was down under his chin and he was strangling. Horrible. Not sure how it ended. In your poem, I could so clearly picture the scene, the gritted teeth.....and then the line of philosophy at the end.......wonderful writing.

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  4. temporal roomsFebruary 16, 2012 at 12:26 PM

    bloody and ready
    that last upper should do it.
    ~robert

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  5. UnknownFebruary 16, 2012 at 3:53 PM

    Taking the punches all the home. Thanks for the read

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  6. Raining IguanasFebruary 16, 2012 at 7:16 PM

    Feel better?

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  7. EllaFebruary 16, 2012 at 11:18 PM

    Yes, the count down and waiting for the hands, to strike the hour to home! Well Done

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  8. AnonymousFebruary 17, 2012 at 6:29 AM

    Great pulse. Clever progression.

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  9. rchFebruary 18, 2012 at 8:01 AM

    Nice battle, never give up!

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  10. Human ParadoxFebruary 18, 2012 at 7:27 PM

    Interesting imagery and rhythm.

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