Monday, August 22, 2011

Fran's Smile



one car -  one street town
Jack gives up
his shotgun rights
slips in the backseat
beckoned by Fran's smile



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23 comments:

  1. erinAugust 22, 2011 at 8:41 AM

    ollie, how is it that the potential here for this new story being born (so long ago) infuses hope in me?

    beautiful.

    xo
    erin

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  2. BerowneAugust 22, 2011 at 11:10 AM

    Nice short story that sums up the prompt beautifully...

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  3. AndreasAugust 22, 2011 at 11:17 AM

    Oh, this is so ingenious, so to the brim filled with meanings.

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  4. Brian MillerAugust 22, 2011 at 11:28 AM

    hehe...ah the backseat carries quite a few memories...

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  5. Carrie Van HornAugust 22, 2011 at 11:48 AM

    What fun this one is....love your take on the prompt Ollie. Hope you have an awesome Monday!
    :-)

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  6. Sherry Blue SkyAugust 22, 2011 at 12:41 PM

    Wow, this takes me back to The Day!!!! Smell of talcum powder and hair oil on the guys, soap and perfume on the girls - those eyes, those smiles, all brand new and hopeful. Lovely.

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  7. HelenAugust 22, 2011 at 1:43 PM

    How clever ... 'I call shotgun' is a phrase I remember fondly!

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  8. JJ Roa RodriguezAugust 22, 2011 at 4:31 PM

    nice one...

    JJRod'z

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  9. FrikoAugust 22, 2011 at 6:29 PM

    Short and sweet; a whole tale told.

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  10. WyomingDivaAugust 22, 2011 at 9:05 PM

    Amazing how a few words capture a whole story!

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  11. Sue JAugust 22, 2011 at 9:11 PM

    Short and sweet. Well done!

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  12. R. Burnett BakerAugust 22, 2011 at 9:31 PM

    Ollie, Ollie. You KNOW that he had no intention of yelling "Shotgun" on this ride!!

    :)

    Rick

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  13. Everyday GoddessAugust 22, 2011 at 9:47 PM

    Oh, the days of back seats!

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  14. Glenn ButtkusAugust 22, 2011 at 10:00 PM

    My 1948 Cadillac convertible
    had leather seat covers, and
    a back seat that could have
    accommodated Hoss Cartwright.
    Raised in Seattle, so I kind of
    missed out on the small town
    LAST PICTURE SHOW kind of
    teen years. Great poetics, Ollie.

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  15. Tumblewords:August 22, 2011 at 10:07 PM

    An absolutely fine, fine read!

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  16. Erratic ThoughtsAugust 23, 2011 at 12:34 AM

    Such a nice story described cleverly in few words...I liked it!:)

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  17. MaryAugust 23, 2011 at 9:54 AM

    Right now I doubt young people can do all that cruising. GAS it too expensive!!!

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  18. robkistnerAugust 23, 2011 at 12:20 PM

    this was warm, human and very inviting...

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  19. PeggyAugust 23, 2011 at 3:06 PM

    Fun and innocent but right on.

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  20. SusannahAugust 24, 2011 at 6:17 AM

    Nice one! ;-)

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  21. Ann GrenierAugust 24, 2011 at 8:21 PM

    Perfect caption for the photo that might very well be the truth of the situation!

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  22. HopeUnbrokenAugust 25, 2011 at 1:35 PM

    of course! why couldn't I see that?

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  23. Tess KincaidAugust 27, 2011 at 4:02 PM

    Shotgun rights...I love that.

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