Thursday, July 30, 2015

heat

i)

heat lightning
pulsing over the forest
merging with moonlight

ii)

sitting well back
from the fading fire
salty sweat beads
drip
rolling down
spruce guitar top

iii)

dock creaks
with each lapping wave
slip feet into the cool
lake water
        then all the way in

hat floats
down the bay


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12 comments:

  1. Eileen T O'Neill .....July 31, 2015 at 12:08 PM

    Brother Ollie,

    Heat or pressure taking its toll perhaps. I heard the words of 'Sittin' in the Dock of the Bay, as I read your words over and over...
    Eileen

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  2. Sherry Blue SkyJuly 31, 2015 at 12:35 PM

    The fires sound too near to you, my friend. Stay safe. We had them here too but ours was put out after it ate a mountain. Many more still burning across Canada. I love the relief of the lake ripples after reading of the intense heat. I felt like I stepped into the water with you.

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  3. colleenAugust 4, 2015 at 8:26 AM

    I like the progression. That's a great visual at the end.

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  4. Vandana SharmaAugust 4, 2015 at 9:45 AM

    lets all fly away :)

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  5. Rosemary Nissen-WadeAugust 4, 2015 at 10:08 AM

    What a delightful picture!

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  6. Kerry O'ConnorAugust 4, 2015 at 12:46 PM

    Each picture-poem offers a glimpse of the season. I really enjoyed the read.

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  7. Sanaa RizviAugust 4, 2015 at 4:05 PM

    I loved the third stanza :D
    Beautifully executed :D

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  8. kaykualaAugust 4, 2015 at 11:16 PM

    Relates very well with the seasonal structure. Wonderful write Bro Ollie!

    Hank

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  9. Gillena CoxAugust 4, 2015 at 11:42 PM

    Lovely set.

    Much love...

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  10. MarianAugust 5, 2015 at 7:02 AM

    Oh I read this as campfire, idyllic, not forest fires. That sweat on the guitar gives it away, and love that image. Nice. Go cool off in that lake already!
    Okay actually I want to be in this poem. :)

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  11. Debi SwimAugust 5, 2015 at 7:35 AM

    Love iii... I've done that except for the hat

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  12. rallentandaAugust 6, 2015 at 9:03 PM

    Like the floating hats...nice one !

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