Thursday, March 24, 2011

the tired monk's uniform

i)

"that a dress?"


take a lotta heat
so beat in these robes

ii)

each sweat bead stings
these salty sweat wasps
over this tonsured head

iii)

thinning wool winter socks
tucked poem deep
into birkenstock feet
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16 comments:

  1. RJ ClarkenMarch 24, 2011 at 7:51 PM

    Definitely a uniform, well described. ☼ (The imagery was great!)

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  2. Sherry Blue SkyMarch 24, 2011 at 8:09 PM

    I love it, every image, the thinning end-of-winter socks, the Birkenstocks........wonderful, Ollie!

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  3. UnknownMarch 24, 2011 at 8:20 PM

    I KNEW he's wear birks!

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  4. EllaMarch 24, 2011 at 11:19 PM

    I love this, "tucked poem deep" struck a cord, in fact your whole, hole poem did! I loved it~

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  5. PeggyMarch 24, 2011 at 11:42 PM

    Wonderful image here Ollie. And thank you for visiting my blog.

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  6. signed...bkmMarch 25, 2011 at 12:15 AM

    Great poem Ollie that last stanza...with the thin woolen sock in brickenstocks... Nice...bkm

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  7. Salem LorotMarch 25, 2011 at 2:13 AM

    You speak volumes in this tight verse. It was like you were at a word auction and at the most appropriate time you bought a word at the highest bidder: Apt, imagery-filled and terse. I love this.

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  8. erinMarch 25, 2011 at 11:17 AM

    from my perspective if you're taken heat for looken/thinken/acten different you are onto something great. yes, the poetry in the sock speaks to me like a tender kind of hurt and personal secret.

    xo
    erin

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  9. Uma AnandaneMarch 25, 2011 at 12:48 PM

    Apt to the prompt.well written form ,uniform

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  10. MaryMarch 25, 2011 at 2:04 PM

    Wonderful description. Like Kim, I knew he wore Birks. I have had Birks for a long, long time. Love'em! And your poem.

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  11. Juice BoxMarch 26, 2011 at 2:01 AM

    I like the second stanza best I think --good as always Ollie!

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  12. Isabel DoyleMarch 26, 2011 at 4:49 AM

    I liked 'tucked poem deep' and no marching to be seen ...

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  13. madhumakhiMarch 26, 2011 at 4:59 AM

    Well described briefly. i liked the 'tucked poem deep'.

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  14. Eileen T O'Neill .....March 26, 2011 at 3:17 PM

    Old Ollie,

    tired monk is perhaps in need of some new socks. The idea of the 'thinning winter socks' seems sad.
    However, tired monk does have good fashion taste, with his birkenstock sandals!!!
    A lovely poem...
    Eileen

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  15. Square CornerMarch 27, 2011 at 9:43 AM

    The uniform of life!!! Square Corner will return.

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  16. Bethany AnnMarch 31, 2011 at 10:42 PM

    ha! woolen socks and birkenstocks! ...doesn't get much more Canadian than this.

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