Thursday, March 24, 2011

the tired monk's uniform

i)

"that a dress?"


take a lotta heat
so beat in these robes

ii)

each sweat bead stings
these salty sweat wasps
over this tonsured head

iii)

thinning wool winter socks
tucked poem deep
into birkenstock feet

16 comments:

  1. Definitely a uniform, well described. ☼ (The imagery was great!)

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  2. I love it, every image, the thinning end-of-winter socks, the Birkenstocks........wonderful, Ollie!

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  3. I love this, "tucked poem deep" struck a cord, in fact your whole, hole poem did! I loved it~

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  4. Wonderful image here Ollie. And thank you for visiting my blog.

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  5. Great poem Ollie that last stanza...with the thin woolen sock in brickenstocks... Nice...bkm

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  6. You speak volumes in this tight verse. It was like you were at a word auction and at the most appropriate time you bought a word at the highest bidder: Apt, imagery-filled and terse. I love this.

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  7. from my perspective if you're taken heat for looken/thinken/acten different you are onto something great. yes, the poetry in the sock speaks to me like a tender kind of hurt and personal secret.

    xo
    erin

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  8. Apt to the prompt.well written form ,uniform

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  9. Wonderful description. Like Kim, I knew he wore Birks. I have had Birks for a long, long time. Love'em! And your poem.

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  10. I like the second stanza best I think --good as always Ollie!

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  11. I liked 'tucked poem deep' and no marching to be seen ...

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  12. Well described briefly. i liked the 'tucked poem deep'.

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  13. Old Ollie,

    tired monk is perhaps in need of some new socks. The idea of the 'thinning winter socks' seems sad.
    However, tired monk does have good fashion taste, with his birkenstock sandals!!!
    A lovely poem...
    Eileen

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  14. The uniform of life!!! Square Corner will return.

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  15. ha! woolen socks and birkenstocks! ...doesn't get much more Canadian than this.

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