This can be taken in so many ways. An outspoken statement against end-of-life at both ends, or a personal account and reflection? Either way, it is powerful.
As always, Ollie, you move your reader with your observation. I love "oh these sputtering hearts".......and I hope YOUR heart beats steady and strong. For we need you!
The cycle of life and the desire to exist, and to prolong that existence. Physical imapirments which weight heavily upon all ages and all along; the right to live, treated with respect.
For some reason this suggested heart disease passed from one generation to another. One hopes the tubes and scars will help the sputtering hearts beat strongly!On The Border
A beginning of life marks the first point on the circle of life. Each living thing has its own life cycle. ...hope the sputtering heart heals soon. Very powerful lines...:)
/ a generational blood-washed theme
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to lingering grandfathers/
Nice line, it is powerful and says so much, like a lyric to a song, perhaps.
This can be taken in so many ways. An outspoken statement against end-of-life at both ends, or a personal account and reflection? Either way, it is powerful.
ReplyDeleteAs always, Ollie, you move your reader with your observation. I love "oh these sputtering hearts".......and I hope YOUR heart beats steady and strong. For we need you!
ReplyDeleteaawwwwwww. ouch, sputtering. all those tubes and wires.
ReplyDeleteand the cycle goes on, perhaps people's mindset can change it...
ReplyDeleteyour words are so visual and raw, nicely done
ReplyDeleteAn honest, touching write, so well done.
ReplyDeleteoh these sputtering hearts indeed! Keep on sputtering and hold that last breath dear!
ReplyDeleteAgain, I love this one. Thanks for posting it - clear message from start to finish and strong visuals.
ReplyDeleteReally like the sputtering hearts and all that it suggests,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Brother Ollie,
ReplyDeleteThe cycle of life and the desire to exist, and to prolong that existence. Physical imapirments which weight heavily upon all ages and all along; the right to live, treated with respect.
Very powerful words...
Eileen
fragile hearts needing much strength - old and young! Keep those sputtering hearts strong!
ReplyDeleteFor some reason this suggested heart disease passed from one generation to another. One hopes the tubes and scars will help the sputtering hearts beat strongly!On The Border
ReplyDeleteSo true that cycles so often repeat from one generation to another. Genetics...or not.
ReplyDeleteA beginning of life marks the first point on the circle of life. Each living thing has its own life cycle. ...hope the sputtering heart heals soon.
ReplyDeleteVery powerful lines...:)
So wonderful and short........ Nice one
ReplyDeleteA multi-layered poem. Life comes in full circle
ReplyDeleteLove! You have a very cool style and you packed in a ton of emotions its a concise but beautifully composed poem
ReplyDeleteseeing a baby on all the heart monitors and tubes....heart breaking....the generational blood washed theme def made me thing of hereditary disease...
ReplyDeleteSo much said with just a few words...beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteVery powerful. Nicely written.
ReplyDeleteI learned so much from these few lines. You do know how to write, Ollie. I admire and appreciate that. Bravo!
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