Tuesday, May 7, 2013

hearts

a sad cycle repeated
a generational blood washed theme
from babies
to lingering grandfathers

more scalpels, tubes, purple scars
oh these sputtering hearts.


22 comments:

  1. / a generational blood-washed theme
    from babies
    to lingering grandfathers/

    Nice line, it is powerful and says so much, like a lyric to a song, perhaps.

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  2. This can be taken in so many ways. An outspoken statement against end-of-life at both ends, or a personal account and reflection? Either way, it is powerful.

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  3. As always, Ollie, you move your reader with your observation. I love "oh these sputtering hearts".......and I hope YOUR heart beats steady and strong. For we need you!

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  4. aawwwwwww. ouch, sputtering. all those tubes and wires.

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  5. and the cycle goes on, perhaps people's mindset can change it...

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  6. your words are so visual and raw, nicely done

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  7. An honest, touching write, so well done.

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  8. oh these sputtering hearts indeed! Keep on sputtering and hold that last breath dear!

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  9. Again, I love this one. Thanks for posting it - clear message from start to finish and strong visuals.

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  10. Really like the sputtering hearts and all that it suggests,

    Elizabeth

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  11. Brother Ollie,

    The cycle of life and the desire to exist, and to prolong that existence. Physical imapirments which weight heavily upon all ages and all along; the right to live, treated with respect.

    Very powerful words...

    Eileen

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  12. fragile hearts needing much strength - old and young! Keep those sputtering hearts strong!

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  13. For some reason this suggested heart disease passed from one generation to another. One hopes the tubes and scars will help the sputtering hearts beat strongly!On The Border

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  14. So true that cycles so often repeat from one generation to another. Genetics...or not.

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  15. A beginning of life marks the first point on the circle of life. Each living thing has its own life cycle. ...hope the sputtering heart heals soon.
    Very powerful lines...:)

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  16. So wonderful and short........ Nice one

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  17. A multi-layered poem. Life comes in full circle

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  18. Love! You have a very cool style and you packed in a ton of emotions its a concise but beautifully composed poem

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  19. seeing a baby on all the heart monitors and tubes....heart breaking....the generational blood washed theme def made me thing of hereditary disease...

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  20. So much said with just a few words...beautifully written.

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  21. Very powerful. Nicely written.

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  22. I learned so much from these few lines. You do know how to write, Ollie. I admire and appreciate that. Bravo!

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/05/10/wounded/

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Thanks for helping with the development of Olsonomics.