Saturday, May 30, 2015

b string lament

b string is slipping
too many high end bends
and butterfly vibratos

tune it up tight
strum out those familiar chords
capo down to reach those notes

singing
but the song is empty
without you
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22 comments:

  1. Vandana SharmaMay 31, 2015 at 7:23 AM

    the last lines reveal the truth, without emotions nothing matters

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  2. Jae RoseMay 31, 2015 at 7:27 AM

    Maybe that's why the guitar is broken..a song needs a 'you' to be played to

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  3. MaryMay 31, 2015 at 7:52 AM

    Sad if the one the song is sung for is gone. A song such as this needs a recipient who is present.

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  4. brudbergMay 31, 2015 at 7:53 AM

    Butterfly vibratos.. this sounds so exciting.. but you need that special other to make it complete.

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  5. XMay 31, 2015 at 8:17 AM

    Without the inspiration, what is a song but words and notes? Nice emotional pull in this Ollie.

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  6. SuyashJMay 31, 2015 at 10:24 AM

    be careful with that vibrato, don't wanna break that string.
    And even if you do , remember you can always get a new set of strings( i like slinkys myself ) that sound fresher

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  7. Sanaa RizviMay 31, 2015 at 10:43 AM

    A beautiful & emotive piece :)

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  8. Sumana RoyMay 31, 2015 at 1:19 PM

    the last three lines say it all...a song without its soul...beautifully penned...

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  9. Eileen T O'Neill .....May 31, 2015 at 2:11 PM

    Brother Ollie,

    It is hard to give life and faith to words, if there is an emptiness at heart. The notes and the chords, seems to sense the discord involved..
    Happier days as summer arrives,
    Eileen

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  10. Sherry Blue SkyMay 31, 2015 at 2:57 PM

    "singing but the song is empty without you........" Poignant, Ollie. Beautifully done.

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  11. C.C.May 31, 2015 at 4:28 PM

    Very moving....those last two lines...wow!

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  12. DonnaMay 31, 2015 at 4:28 PM

    I love how the poem sings on my tongue and then sits sadly empty...wonderfully written.

    Donna@LivingFromHappiness

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  13. Old EggJune 1, 2015 at 1:45 AM

    I am not so sure. I think that longing is a great stimulus to our writing bringing out that never ending desire to love and be loved.

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  14. totomaiJune 1, 2015 at 2:10 AM

    was it lyric-less of no melody at all. poignant piece of poetry

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  15. J Cosmo NewberyJune 1, 2015 at 6:38 AM

    A song without a special 'you' is the saddest lament.

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  16. Gen Giggles June 1, 2015 at 2:44 PM

    Someone to sing to is important.

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  17. ZQJune 1, 2015 at 4:13 PM

    My D sting is tuned perfecting when I hear the gear snap "erck"... I enjoyed this piece smiling.
    ZQ

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  18. UnknownJune 1, 2015 at 6:09 PM

    But one must continue to tune, tighten, release, adapt in order to live, No?

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  19. SusanJune 1, 2015 at 7:54 PM

    All the technical moves can not fill the emptiness of the missing point. A new way to make this point, with the play on a song title--and maybe a missing love as well.

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  20. rallentandaJune 2, 2015 at 9:47 PM

    Butterfly vibrato is a brilliant description of a wobbly vibrato. Sad poem about missing someone. Another light snuffed out !

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  21. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJune 3, 2015 at 9:02 AM

    Oh, that's lovely!

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  22. GailAugust 5, 2015 at 12:21 AM

    I like your style.

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