Saturday, May 30, 2015

b string lament

b string is slipping
too many high end bends
and butterfly vibratos

tune it up tight
strum out those familiar chords
capo down to reach those notes

singing
but the song is empty
without you

22 comments:

  1. the last lines reveal the truth, without emotions nothing matters

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  2. Maybe that's why the guitar is broken..a song needs a 'you' to be played to

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  3. Sad if the one the song is sung for is gone. A song such as this needs a recipient who is present.

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  4. Butterfly vibratos.. this sounds so exciting.. but you need that special other to make it complete.

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  5. Without the inspiration, what is a song but words and notes? Nice emotional pull in this Ollie.

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  6. be careful with that vibrato, don't wanna break that string.
    And even if you do , remember you can always get a new set of strings( i like slinkys myself ) that sound fresher

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  7. the last three lines say it all...a song without its soul...beautifully penned...

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  8. Brother Ollie,

    It is hard to give life and faith to words, if there is an emptiness at heart. The notes and the chords, seems to sense the discord involved..
    Happier days as summer arrives,
    Eileen

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  9. "singing but the song is empty without you........" Poignant, Ollie. Beautifully done.

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  10. Very moving....those last two lines...wow!

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  11. I love how the poem sings on my tongue and then sits sadly empty...wonderfully written.

    Donna@LivingFromHappiness

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  12. I am not so sure. I think that longing is a great stimulus to our writing bringing out that never ending desire to love and be loved.

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  13. was it lyric-less of no melody at all. poignant piece of poetry

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  14. A song without a special 'you' is the saddest lament.

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  15. Someone to sing to is important.

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  16. My D sting is tuned perfecting when I hear the gear snap "erck"... I enjoyed this piece smiling.
    ZQ

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  17. But one must continue to tune, tighten, release, adapt in order to live, No?

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  18. All the technical moves can not fill the emptiness of the missing point. A new way to make this point, with the play on a song title--and maybe a missing love as well.

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  19. Butterfly vibrato is a brilliant description of a wobbly vibrato. Sad poem about missing someone. Another light snuffed out !

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