Tuesday, February 1, 2011

On Discourse

two young monks
       novices
stand - split lip
throbbing hand

tired monk waits
the silence beckons
for answers

"we did nothing"

nose blood runs
free  - curls - flows  - over lips

knuckles swell

more silence

"we were having a discourse

with our fists"
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14 comments:

  1. AndreasFebruary 1, 2011 at 12:21 PM

    "we were having a discourse
    with our fists".

    Yeah, sounds about right. They'll do just fine.

    This is enjoyable throughout.

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  2. SusannahFebruary 1, 2011 at 2:25 PM

    :-) Nice one.

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  3. HopeFebruary 1, 2011 at 8:41 PM

    made me smile. imagery is vivid
    enjoyed this
    thank you

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  4. Human ParadoxFebruary 1, 2011 at 10:11 PM

    This is old school OO. Old school discourse. Nice post.

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  5. all ways 11 o'clockFebruary 1, 2011 at 10:38 PM

    love the imagery here Ollie. two young rouges
    all sweat and bruise. then off for a pint.

    ~robert

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  6. dustusFebruary 1, 2011 at 11:32 PM

    Witty poem that made me chuckle. Nice One Shot!

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  7. Brian MillerFebruary 2, 2011 at 6:40 AM

    if only we could learn better ways of discourse.

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  8. Sherry Blue SkyFebruary 2, 2011 at 11:01 AM

    Clever one, Ollie.

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  9. hedgewitchFebruary 2, 2011 at 12:45 PM

    Silence sometimes the best response..it pulls the excuses out. A nicely condensed and well written piece.

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  10. FireblossomFebruary 2, 2011 at 2:06 PM

    Pugilistic reasoning? Saves on paper, but dentistry costs.

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  11. AnonymousFebruary 2, 2011 at 3:13 PM

    Fists, words, cuffs, blood: Could the point be made any blunter? Not, I think, for a dude ... A knockout.

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  12. SarahFebruary 2, 2011 at 10:14 PM

    I found myself drawn in and swept along, wondering what would happen. I enjoyed it, thanks. =)

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  13. kolemboFebruary 3, 2011 at 3:17 AM

    Oh! Dense. Mesmorising. Very nice, thanks.

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  14. Steve IsaakFebruary 7, 2011 at 4:03 PM

    Great setting, LOL finish.

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